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I thought that was very good. The whole spiral idea was very clever, and left a lot of room for personal analysis into what the spiral meant. I also liked how it drew the speaker in at the end, which made the whole spiral level a lot more chilling than just the children dying.
The only suggestions I really have is the explatives used, and the description of NiGHTS decyaing. I personally thought the explatives should be in-between legitimately odd and believable, although most of them hit that spot on. With NiGHTS, I also suggest making the whole decay description just a bit more chilling. Not exactly grotesque or the "super-realistic" descriptions, just leave a little bit more detail for the reader to come by.
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Member Since 25 Apr 2007Offline Last Active Dec 11 2010 12:01 AM
