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NiGHTS: The Movie
#1
Posted 03 February 2009 - 03:33 PM
The synopsis of the movie will be about NiGHTS' rebellion along with the story of Elliot and Claris.
The main reason why I am posting my idea in the first place is that I have finished step one of the outlining process, and would like some critique.
The First Step
Thank you very much if you choose to critique my Sequence List. I will post with updates, although I will not post the actual screenplay online.
#2
Posted 04 February 2009 - 05:52 PM
I am only writing a NiGHTS screenplay. It will never become a movie because I can't legally submit it to the big guys of the film industry. This project is only for fun, along with giving the fans an image of what a NiGHTS movie will be like if one did exist.
The synopsis of the movie will be about NiGHTS' rebellion along with the story of Elliot and Claris.
The main reason why I am posting my idea in the first place is that I have finished step one of the outlining process, and would like some critique.
The First Step
Thank you very much if you choose to critique my Sequence List. I will post with updates, although I will not post the actual screenplay online.
I suggest making NiGHTS a blend between the good NiGHTS, and the bad NiGHTS, giving him that bad guy feel, and yet he has enough morality to be considered a hero as well.
#3
Posted 04 February 2009 - 06:55 PM
Yet I do have a question for Banipper: Do you mean that you want me to make NiGHTS have more of a bad guy like attitude, even after NiGHTS' rebellion? If that's what you meant, I find it a wonderful idea, because it would add more layers to the conflicts.
#4
Posted 06 February 2009 - 03:11 AM
#5
Posted 06 February 2009 - 03:29 PM
Honestly that is something for me to think about. Although I should acctually write the screenplay before going onto production. I know if I were going to make this into an independent film, it will have to be animated because it is a fantasy film. I have no experience with animation, although I am experienced with live action directing.
I think that is a great suggestion, and will consider it once I am finished with the writing project.
#6
Posted 07 February 2009 - 03:19 AM
#7
Posted 08 February 2009 - 03:23 PM
#8
Posted 09 February 2009 - 03:06 AM
#9
Posted 10 February 2009 - 12:25 AM
lol, I can imagine mission impossible or james bond music in the background.
#10
Posted 10 February 2009 - 10:36 PM
#11
Posted 11 February 2009 - 07:49 PM
On another note, I am working on the beat sheet along with a preview for YouTube. The beat sheet is almost at the mid point. I need to work more on the preview though.
Once I am finished with the beat sheet, I will start the actual screenplay.
My last screenplay (Bleeding Bananas Foster) took me two months to write (Including writing the Beat Sheet), but I wrote that full time. Since this screenplay is being written part time, it will take longer. I will not start the actual movie process until everything is written. The movie is indeed a "maybe."
#12
Posted 11 February 2009 - 09:22 PM
#13
Posted 12 February 2009 - 05:58 AM
#14
Posted 12 February 2009 - 12:50 PM
#15
Posted 18 February 2009 - 07:02 PM
Edit: I did post this here: The Second Step Part 1
#16
Posted 21 February 2009 - 10:43 PM
#17
Posted 22 February 2009 - 02:37 PM
#18
Posted 22 February 2009 - 03:12 PM
To Penlopi:
I acctually didn't know that NiGHTS had met Claris first. The switch will be easy for me, since there is really no reason why I made NiGHTS meet Elliot first.
I'm glad that I made a good balance with NiGHTS' Nightmareness with the revision. I still wanted NiGHTS to be likable in the begging, but still submitting to Wizeman.
#19
Posted 22 February 2009 - 05:42 PM
Keep it comin'!
#20
Posted 23 February 2009 - 12:48 PM
#21
Posted 27 February 2009 - 11:21 PM
#22
Posted 28 February 2009 - 08:25 PM
#23
Posted 03 April 2009 - 10:11 PM
#24
Posted 04 April 2009 - 08:25 AM
#25
Posted 04 April 2009 - 01:20 PM
#26
Posted 05 April 2009 - 12:13 AM
#27
Posted 05 April 2009 - 11:15 PM
You have a finished Screenplay!
Yes, I do speak the truth, the first draft of the screenplay is finished. If anyone is interested in seeing it, please ask! I would love to get some critique for the next draft.
I am not posting this on Deviantart by the way.
#28
Posted 06 April 2009 - 01:09 PM
#29
Posted 29 April 2009 - 05:21 AM
#30
Posted 06 May 2009 - 02:55 AM
#31
Posted 06 May 2009 - 10:23 PM
So, since you have the script, who would you cast? Let's go to fantasyland and pretend any celebrity could be in it.
#32
Posted 07 May 2009 - 03:52 PM
#33
Posted 07 May 2009 - 07:55 PM
I can't wait to read it. Everything can have more work done on it- nothing's perfect, but I bet it will be great.
#34
Posted 23 May 2009 - 05:57 PM
Here are some ideas for my second draft.
-I don't even think that Elliot and Claris even have personalities in my screenplay. So I decided to make Claris an oddball, and Elliot a popular boy/man with high self esteem until he meets Aaron, then his world will fall apart. The reason I am making Elliot and Claris that way is because I want to add a theme of breaking through social norms. That Elliot and Claris still gets along even if are in different cliques.
-I will be adding some Waking World scenes. One of them would be about Claris getting into a cafeteria's sound system and singing some song to the entire school. I was thinking a 90s pop songs in particular, if you have any suggestions, please share. Elliot will know Claris from her song, and gets some kind of secret crush on her. (I want some kind of romance between the two Perfect Dreamers, and I don't want it as spontaneous at the end as it was at my first draft.)
- This is a maybe, but Elliot having an overbearing girlfriend who pushes him too far on his basketball. Elliot wants to dump her, but can't find the strength to do so until the end. (Elliot: I'm not your boyfriend! [Chowder anyone?])
- At Act 2B, NiGHTS and Claris almost lose against Gulpo, and Claris and NiGHTS get into a fight. Claris storms off to Mystic Forest, meets Jackle, they get along well, then Jackle suggests that s/he helps her accomplish her dreams instead of NiGHTS. Claris agrees with Jackle. (Claris= Woman as Temptress [Monomyth anyone?])
- I love Reala's intentions in the first draft, being a Nightmaren who wants his/her friend back. I will change Jackle a little bit. Not only does Jackle want to be as power are Wizeman by having a Prefect Dreamer (Although a single Perfect Dreamer is only half as powerful as Wizeman) but Jackle wants to retrieve the Merge Crystal (The thing on NiGHTS' chest, I made it so it an make NiGHTS merge with Elliot and Claris) to harness the power of a Perfect Dreamer. (Jackle= A pretty bad antagonist)
- Other questions in my mind: Does Claris have any friends? Is Elliot as interesting as Claris? Are the kids' hair natural colored or do they dye it? Should I have an element of Selph? Should I do more to make it follow the Hero's Journey?
If anyone who had read it have any suggestions, please share.
#35
Posted 08 July 2009 - 04:05 PM
#36
Posted 09 July 2009 - 01:28 AM
i have no creativity so i could never do something like this
u haz a gift
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