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As many of you may or may not already know, Torias the Fallen is -was- my fanmaren... Recently, though, an idea has been developing in my head... and this idea has quickly spiraled into a dream, of sorts.
I am going to, hell or highwater, create a comic.

This comic does not have a title... though it does center around Torias, an Id... I'll post concept art at a later date so you can see just what this is... Rest assured it's still rooted quite heavily in Dreams, becasue I can't escape from that realm of though with this...

Some of you will probably accuse me of spending too much time on imagini.com, but unless TRiPPY or DiGi tell me I'm plagerizing (which I don't think I am... I've read Issue 0 of Engelbaum) I won't stop posting this.

Long ago, in the Realm of Dreams, there existed a triumvirate of power responible for the administration of dreams to Humanity...

Nebil- Administers Dreams to torture wicked and clarity to troubled dreamers. King of the Id.

Geah- Administers good Dreams. Queen of the Arch.

Seraphel- Something of a Judge and Gaurdian, responsible for protection of others.

The story surrounds the conditions of Seraphel's rebellion and the events that ensue... anyway... I'll add detail at a later date.

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I just want to warn you that you should not expect this to get published or make money anytime soon. I don't mean to crush your dreams or anything but it is pretty unheard of for a high schooler to land a professional comic career. But I suggest you still definitely make this comic. Working at things is the only way to accomplish anything!
As for a title, don't worry about it yet. The odds are that by the time you're done, inspiration will have struck.

Your Trinity seems odd in its division of power (it sounds like one is justice/good, the another is only good, the other is only justice). I also don't quite understand your usage of "id" - are you talking about the psychological concept or something you are making up? I'm just curious as to how this would actually be implemented in the story. But I guess I'll find out when you've done that.

I wish you good luck and I'll be interested in seeing what you make!

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I am completly aware of that little fact, but I've never been one to easily give up, and thank you for your interest.

"Id" are named after the concept, and serve the same purposes as a Nightmaren, I suppose. It's a bit more compicated than that, though.

As for my trinity... one of them starts a blood bath, but not is all as it seems. I'll type more on this later, I just don't have much time right now, and it's still in the very early conceptual stages. Right now it's fragile, and the bugs need to be worked out of the characters.

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That sounds great! I hope you can find a way to iron out the problems and get this on track. :)

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A couple of things for 'First' as I have now dubbed it. This writing is several months old, so it's not up to par at all, but I wanted to show some development. Oh, and I'ts not really a comic any longer. I'm not really quite sure what to call it, as it's not a proper novel either. We'll just have to play it by ear.

Seraphel stated down upon the small, insignificant building with eyes that seemed somehow too wise for a face so young. Leaning his head back and taking a deep breath, he concentrated on creating for himself a glamour. To appear in such a place amoung so many Humans souls and in a place he was not wanted would be... uncouth.
All at once he ceased and placed his hands at his sides, his circle broken. The magic faded from the air, leaving Seraphel standing, unchanged, upon his cloud. Was he not the most powerful being in all of the Dream Realm? Did he not posess the power of a near-god? To fear discovery by a few measly mortal souls was irrational, and those who opposed him could not harm him for fear of upsetting The Balance or The Natural Order. What, then, could they do to him? Scold him? Really, there was no need to be afraid.
Sighing to himself, the Demon King began to cast an entierly different spell; a Spell of Teleportation. With a magnificent flash he left his cloud, descending upon the small establishment with the grace only a diety could possibly posess.
To the men inside it appeared as if an angel had come down from heaven as the room was bathed in a light so pure it convicted them of all their wickedest sins. Surely this creature must be holy, its face so stuning that even the most hardened of the men in that room felt themselves being moved to near tears. Hands outstretched in a gesture of welcome, the being's feet lighted gently upon the ground, the serene smile upon its face never leaving for a second even as it slowly opened its eyes. With a gaze it could make a man repent of his deepest secrets, it seemed, for nothing could escape the judgement of a being so pure. Even as the light faded the resplendance of the creature did not diminish, in fact when the holy departed the creature seemed even more magnificent in light of the dilapidated structure.
"I am here for Charolette," said the creature in a voice that was clearly male.
All at once a cloaked figure that no one in the room had noticed stepped forward, removing their hood and with it the glamour of a man. Behind the hood it seemed was a girl, her beauty paling in comparision to that of the creatures.
"You should learn to be more discreet," she scolded, to the great chagrin of everyone else in that small, smokey room.
The being shook his head and his smile disapeared, but he said nothing, waiting for her to continue the dialouge.
The next morning, when those dreamers woke from their sleep, all of them would marvel at the strangess of the angel who had appeared to judge them for their misdemeanours...

Having fallen in love with Raph, who's changed a bit since this was written, I think you at least should have a physical description of him.

Seraphel: Demon King of Id, and the Discerning Magistrate, Seraphel has an iron will and a keen sense of judgement as the Lord of Dream World. He is extremely tall, with limbs like a rag doll's (starting out thin and progressivly getting larger as they near the hands and feet), and sharp features. His eyes are a unique shade of indigo that almost seem to flash violet in certain lighting, and his hair is long and silver. Unique tatoos line his face like a diadem and spiral up his long, elfin ears that stick out of his hair at a 75 degree angle. He is adorned in a loose fitting shirt with a feathered cloak that has an appearance that resembles wings.




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